Aries Sky UPDATE Part 2

I cleaned up some stuff in Chapter 1 and rewrote some stuff. I didn't want to add in a bunch of stuff as it will be redundant in chapter 4 and take away from some of the reveal, also- in comic wouldn't make sense for the characters to be talking about in the moment. I also don't want to take away from what will be revealed in Chapter 4 but it should set up enough things that logical progression will make sense and still keep it's suprises later for a new reader.

You guys got me so excited I should be finishing chapter 3 up by the end of the week and starting chapter 4 next week.

I'm trying to go with the Intro-Action-Drama-Suprise-Reveal sequence to keep the story interesting throughout so it won't stagnate. That forumula should repeat in every couple of chapters to make things interesting.

View chapter 1 here:

http://www.inkblazers.com/read-manga/Aries-Sky-Chapter-1-Home-Sweet-Home/7194/0/0?lang=en

The first 3 pages are the same as the text was hard saved into the pages so I didn't want to totally redo that. The updates start at about page 4 I believe.

It's also updating on NG but NG is finicky and doesnt update all at once

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Doomroar 2014-07-08 09:44:29

So did NG let you make the update?

Kel-chan 2014-07-08 09:44:29

I update some pages but when I click on them- it's still showing the old version

Doomroar 2014-07-08 13:29:04

Wow just noticed that the double page 9 is not here on NG, was that the change?

Kel-chan 2014-07-08 13:29:04 (Updated 2014-07-08 13:35:29)

From page 4 to probably page 17 was changed.

Newgrounds is very slow to update the pages and also there are a few pages that are out of order

I suggest you check the comic here as everything is perfect

http://www.inkblazers.com/manga-and-comics/Aries-Sky/detail-page/7194?lang=en

Doomroar 2014-07-08 14:45:59

Yeah there is where i noticed that page 9 was not here.

But maybe NG already updated because i don't see the differences
http://art.ngfiles.com/images/301000/301697_kel-chan_aries-sky-pg-10.jpg
http://www.inkblazers.com/read-manga/Aries-Sky-Chapter-1-Home-Sweet-Home/7194/0/10?lang=en

Kel-chan 2014-07-08 14:45:59 (Updated 2014-07-08 23:19:27)

some pages were cleaned up- Like this page, what was updated was the fonts, and bubbles on this page.

Major Changes are as follows
page numbering is per the inkblazer comic (the page #s get changed when I add covers and things so the page numbers for NG and inkblazers are not the same)

Page 7, 8. Rock and Rion's Bios have additional information
Double page 10 has additional dialogue
Page 14 has additional information in the boxes at the bottom about the Norric race

Other pages have cleaned up speech bubbles and the Font text was changed so that Chapter 1's font text was the same as the other chapters.

Also the inkblazers link was outdated because at the bottom it says theres only 19 pages in the chapter and there are 24.

Or perhaps that's just my browser that has not updated because on my other computer, everything is fine. On the old computer those links are not updated and still have the thick speech bubble outline and the old font.

Try closing and reopening your browser or restarting your computer because since you've clicked on the links before it is going to your cache date since the file name is the same instead of downloading the new picture to view.

This is the only thing I hate about the NG art portal. It can take a day or 2 to update things whereas inkblazers is automatic

Doomroar 2014-07-09 15:08:29

As of now everything seems to be updated, interesting additions you made, i specially liked the extra info on page 14, that's a nice detail.

Kel-chan 2014-07-09 15:08:29

Interestingly enough, I've just realized I haven't used thought bubbles much at all. So you don't know what char's are thinking. I think doing this will add more dimension to things in the future.

Doomroar 2014-07-09 16:29:05

That may help us to know them better, i agree it will help.

killerjeff 2014-07-09 19:18:56

Drop that fat chocolate drop and get with the white stallion.
xoxo